atariel lossehelin

I adore old books! I have quite a few & they're awesome.

oh my gosh I absolutely adore this poem... "off death-dates shunned." that line kind of messed up the flow... Other than that, none of the lines really bothered me flow-wise.

Bravo! The rhythm and rhyming were spectacular. I found the poem rather amusing in a disturbing way. And though I find cannibalism (hope I spelled that right) to be a ...

Oh my lol. We need more information about the person; make us care who they are. And why were they captured? Who were they running from? It doesn't quite make ...

nah, I know you're not trying to criticize or anything.

OK PEOPLE!!! PLEASE! Can I say to mr purple balloon or whomever, no offense, but lighten up?! Good lord. I thought the dizziness of the people the princess was explaining ...

Okeydokers. My aunt would KILL you for your use of block formatting... lol. Some of your sentance structures could use some work, but it's good. Any PARTICULAR reason you used ...

I agree with the person who said you should use words like "ain't" and such, it would make it even more amusing than it is. And good gosh I wish ...

OMG! This poem was SO you lol. Much, much better than the one you did with... well I have an idea of what 7-year-old you were writing with lol. However, ...

*sigh* Elle darling, you really could have done better... However, your (first??) rather interesting attempt at writing a poem with a 7-year-old did not make me want to scream and ...

I actually liked the way you repeated the title every time. Just my personal opinion on that one. So anyway, I absolutely loved the it!

the way some of the lines were formed kind of left the poem without flow. The part where you said "And a change in thought Will have things popping Too." ...

I actually think the ending is good, I liked its abruptness; I didn't think it was that abrupt anyway. It's true, some more imagery would be good, but that would ...

Wow.. someone loved it! Amazing... thx :)

Lol and hi to Ed. And to my lovely friend, what have you been telling them??? Lolz. And you're completely entitled to your opinion, poet or not. And you could ...